[pre]"Fighting"
Holding on to all the pieces
knowing I could fall apart at anytime.
Walking strong with your eyes piercing.
Head held high
I won't ever quit
You can think what you want
It won't hurt me.
I don't care what you think or how you feel.
You try to tear me down with meaningless words.
You try to convince me there's no hope.
You're wrong,
There is hope.
Look in your heart; it'll tell you what's real.
I've looked and have found a peaceful place.
It gives me strength that I never knew I had
Fighting and pushing forward.
Though I am broken
I push through and live to prove you wrong.
Knowing there's hope as long as I have faith.
Is there hope left for you?
~ Kazie[/pre]
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Yeah thanks! i feel apreciated for a change. my parents dont really like that i write. they think its good but they dont like that i love it. its my passion i feel when i write otherwise i am just another person doing the same old thing day by day.
Excellent. I have read a lot of your poetry, and when I read it, I can feel the strong emotions you are feeling when you write. Keep up the good work!
Thank you! IM SO HAPPY SOMEONE LOOKED AT MY WORK!!! LOL i like ppl being honest and telling me how 2 improve
i like this, it shows strength, and the ability to overcome.
the only errors i found are a few periods missing at the end of a few lines.
other then that this is very good. i like the emotion
kim