Kim

this has the making of a great story. my suggestion , would be to slow down while writing it. dont rush from one scene to the next. take your time. ...

This is very good, i enjoyed reading it, and also look forward to your next chapter. i have only two changes to mention. as mentioned above, i would break up ...

i like this , it is getting really interesting. i like the way you are starting to pull your characters together. the only thing i can find is, does christian ...

As i started reading, i could understand , then get confused, then understand. i liked it . it kept me guessing, you put emotion in there and at times i ...

this is very good, i like the way your characters talk to each other so easily. i dont normally look for errors as i read,, i choose to enjoy the ...

hey BBB, this one kinda scared me lol, wasnt expecting the ending. the story is great, the only thing i can find is, honestly, a mare is a female horse. ...

this definately does not belong in romance. lol. you hve me hooked BBB. this is very good, keep posting. i like your imangination, i had no idea that your story ...

i love it, i sure hope you have the 4th chapter done, cause honestly it is hard waiting . :D you took your story in a whole different direction, i ...

thanks for letting me know the 2nd chap. was up. other then typo errors, i really like it. i could feel the emotion you are trying to aim for. her ...

what i felt whle reading your poem, is that two hearts connect again. find each other, since it is internet communication they cant quite combine. also at the end you ...

i loved this story, very well written. very discriptive. it had me to the very end. i could feel the emotions, here the birds, see the sunshine and feel the ...

i am so sorry, that you have had to go thru all that. life is sometimes not fair. i am happy that you are writing, it helps to get things ...

you are on to something, a very good plot and an unexpected ending, the only thing i didnt like was the story line moved to fast. to much information in ...

i really liked this, the discription is very real. i sensed the mental, but more of the underworld, not always speaking english, made me think of evil, for they speak ...

ok, that was sad and scary, i only hope it isnt your true feelings, while reading it , it just seemed very cold, the person was very cold. if that ...