Kiki

Thank you very much for your help, guys!~ I appreciate it

Fae Ling's name has changed to Lai Choi. A little inside about her: Throughout history this family has been the leaders of the Jiao Pirate and only Women have had ...

Thank you very much

Thank you so much Meadow!! =D *huggles* I hope you had fun on your camping trip!

READ me after, please

Thank you so much Alice

Haha :D Thank You ^^ But I'm over the guy and all now :P I Wrote that a little while ago, we are still friends though which is good :wink: ...

I still really like it!! The revised one has more description. Although there is still a lot of dialog, which still isn't a bad thing considering you put a lot ...

I enjoyed this =D I dont remember if i read the first chapter or not, but I think i did xD Keep it coming!! *huggles* ^_^

Thanks so much Meadow =D The daze was caused by her headache. >.< i wrote it in that paragraph...I guess it wasnt enough, im sorry! And I'm also sorry for ...

It's good. Keep them coming. Just a few reminders; You get repetive with your word choice a little too often. And, I'm not certain I understand the....fascination with Kiki's breasts. ...

I like it! Everyone else beat me to all the corrections and things. Keep it up hun! =D

**Still in shell shocked mode** This is absoulutely amazing. I can't belive there was so much I had to learn about writing !! I'm not sure about one thing though ...

The next day after we arrived, a bath was needed Then it goes into a flash back to the day after they arrived at the castle with Pink. It may ...

We know it's an accident. That's why you post stuff here, so others will review, and help you spot these things. ;) hehehe! Thanks! =D *huggles*