Kaylyn

Thanks so much for all the critique I have been given, it has tremendously halped my book. Hopefully this edition will be better.

Oh sorry, you must of edited it while I was typing in the critique.LOL

Really good, I liked it Jenny. It had a nice flow. You seem very talented at poetry, unlike me.:) Keep up the good work and keep writing.

Thanks, I am not very good at poetry, much better at writing stories. I guess though when emotions are a factor that I have just expirenced I do much better.

Thanks, that sounds better than mine. Hehe, I'll change it.

I did spell Queste wrong, but its on purpose. Thats for pointing out those mistakes. I really appriciate it. Thanks for your review!

Thanks, I'll get to editing it today or tomorrow. Chapyer Four had been posted by the way.

Sorry, I am trying to break myself out of the POV switching habit, I'll change it. Moira is just a name I got off the Internet, it sounded like a ...

You'll find out, I don't want to ruin the next few chapters.

Hey, I liked Zane better than David. David's too moody and he listens to everything his mother says. I hated it when Zane died, I almost cried, which is no ...

Hey, I liked Zane better than David. David's too moody and he listens to everything his mother says. I hated it when Zane died, I almost cried, which is no ...

Thanks alot! I really love to read and thickness doesn't bother me. I'm a speed reader. I read Breaking Dawn in less than twelve hours. I've heard of these, and ...

Thanks!

Hey if you're lookinh for something to review, please let me know what you think about my latest book, Looking Glass, or Half-Blood. I heard their pretty good. :)

Yeah this is Ch. 1-3. To read it in shorter sections just read the posts. Thanks for the critique I really appriciated it.