Kaylyn

I have to agree with the previous, the last line does seem a bit rushed. The last two lines of the first stanza seem a bit cliche to me. This ...

I would take out the last stanza. Its awkward and ruins the flow. I like the first three but the rhyming sounds a wee bit forced. Loosen up a little. ...

I am but an illusion, Here and gone at the same time; I send those who glimpse at me quivering With fear, they run home shrieking First off your poetry ...

When someone takes the time to review your poems, please don't patrinize them. They do take time to try to help you and when you react like that others don't ...

I understood the whole poem. I knew what it was about. However, it wasn't written in poetic form. More of a short story. There wasn't really a rythm or a ...

When you look out into the ocean You might think what lives below When you search through the forest You might think about what was here before When you are ...

[quote]A large, rotund woman, fat rolling over her khakis, gets the bread dough, which is the color of her skin and beats it.[quote] I agree. I don't like the word ...

Okay, I'm going to critique this quite truthfully. I'll try not to rip it apart, but I make no promises. Befor last night, you were my world. But now it ...

Okay, Here goes the review. I'll start will the bad things first. Then I'll point out the good. Honestly, this piece didn't catch my attention. It bored me really throughout ...

Jack the Ripper...the serial killer that went after young unmarried women. I have heard of him, yess... This is going to be interesting. First off, you build up the scene ...

Okay, heres your review: I thik that you made a mistake writing this poem, one that almost everyone makes: Forced rhyming. A poem doesn't have to rhyme (although rhyming poems ...

John made his way up to his fiancé’s apartment, eager to see the woman who held his heart. Because this is the woman that is the fiancee it is spelled ...

I was cold two Wrong spelling of two there. It should be too. “Uh-oh, they’ll get it now.” “Is Bill still down there?” “I guess that’s the end of that.” ...

Prologue The three of us, Adam, Landon, and myself were in the “turning room” as we so solemnly nickname it. Adam sat down in the chair and we bound him ...

I so did an indept review on the story, the computer ran too low on the battery and shut off. *screams* The bad thing is that this happens often. So ...