KatTrain

My love , listen to me I want you to be with me I love you more than my life Please would you be my wife ?? We are so ...

I feel the light inside me dim, As I know she is not there. By my side I wish she was, But not until we meet again. You use 'but' ...

He’s turned me into a typical girl. They said I’m a typical girl now. The repetition of the line was unnecessary, and who is 'they'? I used to like jazz, ...

I am from my dads house quiet, still and peaceful I 'm from my moms house where it is loud but reassuring and safe I'm from accidents in cars where ...

Cliche much? Yes I'm aware. She let him be an escape from all her pain and grief his solicitous words and soft whisperings lulling her gently to sleep He was ...

Once upon a time we were humans. Once upon a time, in a long forgotten land We were independent people, fighting the world hand in hand. But our humaity was ...

I'm not going to nit pick you on this. Everyone has left sufficient (and mainly justified) critiques. However, many people have failed to mention that it is a creative poem ...

I'm guessing this is on the subject of a car or motorcycle or something? Unless you're talking about a dog (shining red coat, all I can think of is Shiloh), ...

Tell me, does the rain fall where you are? Does it sometimes come pouring down in sheets that hammer the roof above your head, even as the thunder rumbles so ...

To take my mind off things at home I've decided to go for a casual stroll Far away from the things that remind me The people, the silence, the smell ...

I know I may never get her back, add a period on the end of this line of the next depending on your meaning I know that, even as I ...

I been enjoyin' all the gossipin' and jabbin' but soon enough it starts agin' and I'm cravin' something more for my imagination to feast on. I'm a beast time with ...

I reallllllllly like this. The only thing i found weird was 'discreetly resentful' 'cause I know I openly complain about the time... but maybe I misinterpreted it? I also like ...

Slender beams of silver moonlight enter this darkened prison as I kneel. I am always cold, always lost. I am frozen here, waiting. This line wasn't as colorful as the ...

The problem with this poem is that you told me what happened. You need to show not tell. The word choice is cliche 'poison, suffocate'. Those might be okay words ...