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I haven't read the other parts, so if I point out something that makes sense in the context of the novel, don't mind me. XD He made his way up ...

Hello there, and welcome to YWS. I see you've only made this one post, so I suggest that you go out and review other people's writing and maybe introduce yourself ...

Allow me to profess my undying love and devotion to you, my darling Jagged. I happily accept any and all blame related to this poem. My only suggestion for this ...

Hello there, and welcome to YWS. I see you haven't reviewed anyone yet, so I suggest you get around to doing so soon. It will not only get you more ...

Honestly, I'm not sure what to make of this, or what you wanted feedback on. For one, it's so short, and, for another, since it's the end of the novel, ...

This was interesting. At first, I wasn't sure I'd like the repetition of the patterpitterpatter, but it worked for this. You also had some great imagery going here, comparing the ...

I'm here to critique, as promised! *salutes* And the first thing I notice is that my user title is as apt as ever. XD Himalayan Pomegranates This title made me ...

Clarity Pyramid - Struck me as very vague, non-specific, and uninteresting. Etheree - You're missing a period after "for" which really tripped me up. Also, this struck me as too ...

Hello there! I saw that you posted in chat, and I decided to give you a review. Since you're fairly new, I'm not sure if you're aware that you should ...

There were teardrops in my eyes Watch your spelling. Ya, I missed you, too This line came out of nowhere. I think it would work better if you had a ...

The golden elixir has spilled for only you. These lines are pretty and all, but what is the golden elixir, and why is it significant? You mention it once and ...

Compared to the weather lately, that was warm. "Lately" should only be used when writing in the present. As you're writing about past events, "Compared to the recent weather" makes ...

Hello there. You look pretty new, so might I suggest that you get around to reviewing other members' writing. Doing so will not only get you more reviews in turn, ...

I wouldn't want to miss it for nothing You've got a double negative here, so it basically means that you'd gladly miss whatever it is. If that was your intention, ...

I may find it filled with joy Before you post your writing anywhere public, it's always a good idea to go through your work again and check it for mistakes. ...