Kale

Oh dear... Where to start? The beginning is as good as any, I suppose... The funeral scene Is it really necessary? As far as I can tell, it is all ...

So... The entire family plus Black are inside a barn, asleep, and the authorities only take the father? And then they leave behind a ransom note? Why? They could have ...

Lyra Goodfellow was the perfect vicar's daughter - the cream of the crop; pride and joy of her family; her temperament, dreamy; her constitution, rosy; her etiquette, flawless. She learnt ...

That was an excellent first chapter. I hope you post the next chapter soon; I want to read the rest of this. I actually don't have anything to critique. This ...

its altitude so towering Altitude is a location (noun) and not a descriptor (adjective). The dying light smoldered beneath the crimson cloud; the sun’s concluding breath now hid from view. ...

First thing I'd like to point out is that the paragraph breaks are off. For instance: I turned to look at him and nearly feel over as his blood red ...

When i first went there i walked with a big beach bag loaded with a towel, a book, my iPod, and my cell phone. Is it important to know every ...

Night fell quickly; darkness draped over the serene village, lit only by the rainbow colours of twinkling Christmas lights. A full stop would work better than a semicolon. Darkness is ...

I would have been engaged, married, ruled my kingdom and beared heirs to the throne. I would have lived happily ever after. Beared should be "borne". The way I remember ...

I would definitely continue reading. Herald really caught my interest, and I want to know more about him and hear the story he is going to tell. A thousand sparks ...

That was so sad but sweet, and I'm a sucker for bittersweet stories. XD This gets a gold star from me. :3 The lullabies bit was my favorite.

Well, Pippie was very thorough and pointed out most of the stuff I was going to. There are a few things, though, that I think could use some looking at. ...

"Isn't God here?" "Why am I here?" why does it seem to be that no one gives a damn? When the preacher man finally came home, he found enough money ...

the paradox of a shared end is each dies alone; trapped in our steel-walled prisons with vacant deities to preserve our bones. This was my favorite stanza. It sounds so ...

Hello, evil_kookies (did you mean cookies or crazies?). I shall be your reviewer today. First things first: the summary. Love, Homosexuality, Lesbianship,& Much more. The story summary should briefly