Kafkaescence

Rhyming's great for establishing meter, but it turns into a hindrance when you let it control you. Remember: let the rhyme fit the poem, not the poem fit the rhyme. ...

1. I found it difficult to really visualize this. What shape is the room in? Are they standing, or is Winnie sitting on the floor in grief? Give me some ...

I eat my words, almost breathe them out before my fangs catch them and they retreat behind my hungry lips You try to attribute some sort of cause-and-effect relationship between ...

1. Trash the prologue. It's basically spoon-feeding me information that would be better kneaded into the actual plot via interaction or thoughts or dialogue. 2. Proof this, thanks. Look especially ...

So how is an eleven-year-old girl able to take down a grown man? And even if she is superhuman, why would she? It's her dad. It's not cute, it's vicious. ...

Hey. So this was actually fairly polished, syntactically, so I'll just help you tackle a few of the macros so you can go ahead and push forward with your novel. ...

Your trust, Its like a bright light, Filled with hope, Something that is so close in sight. The passive phrasing of lines one and two makes for a very weak ...

The thing that stood out most is the fact that anyone that chooses to write professionally, such as the protagonist of this piece, will have certain methods to overcome what ...

An answer to your question: Stereotypes are assumptions used to fill the holes when we don't have a complete picture of something. Societies may establish, nurture, and perpetuate a stereotype ...

Death; The only state which no living man has knowledge or memory of. The man's eyelids were once again closed, and his whole body gave up to the departure of ...

Note: I haven't read any previous chapters, so if anything I mention here is explained earlier, just take it with a grain of salt. 1. That opening paragraph is a ...

Yeah, that title isn't great. Incorporating the sphinx is fitting, but the placement of "matters" causes it to just as easily read "The Sphinx Matters" where "matter" is a verb ...

Yes I know "screaking" isn't a word... but fortunatly in poetry we have the leniancy to make up words sometimes! Really? Where did you get that impression? Ash falls like ...

1. I'd like to get more of a feel for the protagonist by the end of a first chapter. The first chapter is where I, along with some 90% of ...

1. You're going to need to get someone to proof this if you want it to be taken seriously. It's laden with run-ons and misplaced punctuation and other such errors, ...