Kafkaescence

The concept of a soul. Could I see it if I tore open your chest? Could I hold it within my palm it and clutch it between my fingers? No, ...

Okay, here it is. This was well written and well thought out. I'm glad you went into the explanation about z-poc, because it definitely helped me see just how much ...

I like the potential of this story. Not that it isn't already REALLY cliched, but I have a feeling your retelling will make a whole new story out of the ...

Okay, my main critique would be, like the previous reviewer, the dialog. I just can't see the characters saying these things. The very first telephone conversation between the nurse and ...

This piece is emotional and mysterious at the same time. That's a very strong combination. Before I get into my bigger critiques, here are some specific ones: Remember the pain ...

Sorry, I don't have any advice, but I do have a nice, complete edit. Forgive me if I'm harsh. I knew her because her mother was friends with my mum ...

I wish poetry was like a cup of water. I wish I could just pick up this poem in my hand and let a single drop of its contents spill ...

Nice use of rhyming and beat, but some more detail would definitely make the poem better. Metaphors are especially powerful. I would also refrain from telling us the cause of ...

This is perhaps one of the most captivating stories I have read yet on the site. And I am not joking. Though the writing is commendable, this is not what ...

Although I like the way you describe the fear, my experience tells me that metaphors and similes give the best descriptions. There are many that can be associated with fear, ...

This is an interesting poem. The way you broke up the lines was very unique, and really seemed to fit with the story you tell. I have one critique. It ...

It is interesting how you present this poem. I have some suggestions. Though you do a fairly good job of making the lines rhyme, I would just get rid of ...

If you're trying to tell the story from a "teenage girl" point of view, I think you're overdoing it. The biggest error I found throughout the piece is your habitual ...

I liked the content of this poem. For such a deep subject, I think that you could have gone just a bit deeper, in the word choice specifically, although there ...

Actually, this isn't bad for your first time. I can tell you that joining YWS was probably the best step you'll ever take in that direction. I'll cut right to ...