Kafkaescence

Sorry about the delay. I wasn't feeling too well, and couldn't write a decent review for the life of me. The italics kind of make it a bit more difficult ...

My plump, purplish friend. The Force was with you as you wrote this. Obi-Wan would be proud. Strong in the Force, you have grown. Yet still much, you have to ...

I'll have a proper look at this for ya in the morning *yawns* Same here. Snoink reminded me of that post...Gah, I've been so busy lately. Sorry. we like to ...

Oh, Shadz. If Kafka was a mathematician, this would be a classic. With a little work, of course. I'll start with the praise. I love how you personified the three ...

Kafka here, as requested. Sorry about the delay. :? Maybe I write of the pain because pain is all I feel. Maybe I put loss in words because my loss ...

While you were hiding under you rock (Rocks. They're cool.), a giant aardvark came down from the sky and sucked up all my niceness. So. Lately, my reviews have been ...

Forest. I love your avatar, by the way. So. I look at you, Your shining blue eyes, Your perfect smile, Holding me under your spell. I fall to the ground, ...

Urgh. I can't see the symbols in the poem for some reason. They only show as little boxes. I have no doubt that my experience would have been oh-so-much better ...

Let's take this stanza by stanza, shall we? Grammatical errors will be in red. Such a shy little girl am I. I didn't know love could be so conspicuous. Maybe ...

Hi. Kafka here. Grammatical errors are in red. Just close your soul Disregard the passing lies It's safer if you just stay dead Nevertheless, come be alive Its dangerous to ...

Kafka here. Time for another review. This has potential. I'll give you that. In fact, I'll give you more than that: I like the potential it has. But. There's definitely ...

Dripping from my mouth, Splashing all around. Simplistic and cliched, let alone devoid of any sense of imagery. I cover my lips with smeared fingers Too long. With shorter lines ...

This was a pretty good poem. I liked the second half, but the first half needs reworkage. "Kiss to the bones?" Usually people plant a kiss on something, not to ...

You're always wearing a mask Afraid to show the world Cliched. Try to say this in a more original way. Who you really are You never stop acting Never stop ...

Firstly, what's up with your formatting? There're two spaces between some stanzas and only one between others. This poem needs a big dose of one thing: rhythm. It seems like ...