Young Writers Society

This was fun to read, in a creepy Lovecraftian sort of way. The ending was intriguing. I obviously don't know much about the larger narrative context here and where this ...

Beautiful, angsty piece. I would have loved to see more of a focus on the grave of your grandmother, as that seems to be the main tangible emotional anchor to ...

I wonder who the person being addressed is—a mentor, a part of yourself, a deity, a fabrication? Anyway, this was enjoyable to read and I like that your theme is ...

Yo, seems like cC got most of the small stuff but here's some more I found: “It’s a Maori thing,” he said, the first syllable rising gently as his mouth ...

I enjoyed this, thanks for posting. I liked the subtle storytelling and the homely atmosphere. The last stanza was fantastic. In stanza one I didn't like the contrast between "goodness, ...

Your diction is well-practiced and pleasant to read. I would imagine this would sound even better read aloud. I don't really see the purpose of all this. The end was ...

Okay, but be wary about where your bounds lie as an advocate of gender equality. Too many feminists, historically and contemporarily, forget their ideals and forget their audience and end ...

I like this. I like the storytelling and the allegory, and I'm glad you were able to free yourself from this weight you've been carrying. The last section was unexpectedly ...

This feels repetitive and unimaginative, to be blunt. In fact, it seems to reiterate the same theme of troubled love throughout all three stanzas; at the end, I am fed ...

I read it. I liked it for its purposefulness and its straightforward direction. It's not particularly thought-provoking in that sense, but subtlety is more of a literary virtue than a ...

I rarely review anymore, but I was in a literary mood (it's a thing), so I'll walk you through this one. he sits at the edge Who? The edge of ...

Your writing has a practiced rhythm to it that is so distinctly rooted in poetry that it's hard to really take this seriously as a piece of prose. The diction ...

the obvious has been filled in and the blank cells taunt your memory as you wonder if you ever knew the answers. You reach the summit, which you know is ...

I think there needs to be a stronger connection between part one and two. As what I'm certain is intended to be the central conflict is emerging, his earlier conference ...

Some notes: He opened his mouth, a gesture reminiscent of a yawning toad, and emitted two booming syllables: "Reminiscent of" denotes similarity to something in the beholder's past, and, as ...