KJ

NITPICKS: It was evening, warm and breezy. In all the summer nights that had been seen in Cumbria [Awkward wording. Try something like: In all the summer nights Cumbria had ...

Hey Jane. Can I call you Jane? :) I just wanted to let you know that I liked this piece a lot. I see you've already gotten many reviews just ...

Hey, I'm KJ. I decided to lay off on nitpicks with your piece, because I didn't spot many while reading, and it looks like the reviewer above me covered most ...

NITPICKS: I was being hunted by my own kind. I like your hook, but this spoils the intensity. You're diving into it too fast. Sure, we want to know why ...

NITPICKS: He’s looking down at me with a blank expression on his face, a short white stick hanging out between his closed lips. He’s moving it around too much that ...

The night was dark, darker than normal. A young girl in a dirty, worn out dress dragged her feet across the fields, heading towards the one place she had ever ...

Hey. This is payback for reading one of my chapters for The Experiment. Thanks a lot for taking the time to do so. And now, on to the review. I ...

I liked this a lot, actually. Only problem I had with it - well, there's two actually - was, one, it was too melodramatic in some parts, and two, the ...

As It [Why is It capitalized?] has been stated by a friend quite dear to my heart; "life can be compared to an ocean." [I think it should read like ...

"Ugh!” Ryan slammed to the ground, blood around her lips [Describe more here. Where is the blood coming from? Is there a cut on her lip? The sentence is just ...

Hi, Dr. Pepper. I'm KJ. I noticed that you've gotten more than enough nitpicks, so I'll leave off on those this time. I wanted to give you a couple observations ...

Hi, Tuna. The nitpicks have pretty much been covered, so I'll leave that department alone. I just wanted to give you a few tips that occured to me as I ...

Hi, I'm KJ. I spotted no nitpicks to point out here - I was skimming, I'll admit. But I just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed this. You ...

Hi, I'm KJ. I don't have much to say about this first chapter, because honestly, I didn't finish. The narrative began well, actually. I liked the short Preface and your ...

Hey Ash. I think I've already read this, but I just wanted to say I'm so glad you're getting inspiration again. Maybe it's the summer air - I've been writing ...