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Hello kikialicia31, Nice poem! But you need to add punctuation and CAPITALIZE the first letter in every sentence. It would look better and less rushed this way! I'm trapped in ...

Hey rememberme! This is a nice poem, but I have a few little things that I would change. So pretty much, I would split it up into stanza's so as ...

Hey WW! Amazing poem! I would never think you could make a poem about a mannequin, but hey you did, at it was awesome! The flow was great! One of ...

Hey Thatboy! I would like to start with, amazing piece! It flows wonderfully and you had some great word choices! For me it was a nice length, if a poem ...

Hey Lukan! I really loved this poem! The only thing i cutting it up like that made it sound choppy and stiff. Maybe instead of spacing it out like that ...

I loved it! I love, love, loved it! Amazing! :D Usually I would tell people to add more imagery, but in this case I think it would ruin the poem. ...

Hey! This piece flows so nicely! The rhyming is perfect! I love it, but I think you could use more imagery! Explain more of how she felt, and give us ...

I'm not going to stand here and watch you burn It's not worth watching the tears your crying now You will always be safe here In my arms you're safe ...

I really, really loved this! It is so true how being a teenager is swinging on a swing! It really hooked me into what you wrote and kept me interested ...

I really liked this! The only grammar error I could find was when you said "I use to be" It would be "I used to be". Other then that I ...

Hey Crimson, I will be your reviewer for today! *sarcastically* I love you for putting this up! This poem is amazing in it's simplicity! You deserve a gold star! Now ...

I loved this poem! I loved these lines "Her big brown eyes looked up at me,and though it was the dead of night, you could still see her frozen cheeks," ...

hey, heybeccahey! NEWBIE! XDDDD (here on YMS we like to scare, stalk, and welcome new people!) Anyways back to the review! I liked this, although some of it was confusing. ...

I like the whole cloud idea. The first line really brought me into the story, which is good for such a short piece, well any piece. But it was good, ...

Hi! Ok for starter it was kind of boring. It is a great topic to write about because people think about death on a daily basis. But it needs something ...