Published August 29, 2010
The dust is falling,
and the phone waits, as I'm begging,
for a renewed, real you to call me.
To call me.
But it's silent, forever.
Your stained now, your empty.
We both feel no feelings,
we just want free.
(chorus)
And when you want to see me fading,
you'll just drink past all the time.
And when I beg that you stop fading,
I'll just sleep until it's blind.
When your not you, I'm not me.
That stranger reasons, and I always believe.
They have your body,
and they want your time now.
Your time now.
Chemicals are your bloodstream,
and I don't care now,
You're just a zombie.
Your World's a white cloud.
And I'm nothing.
I'm nothing to you.
(chorus)
Cause' when you want to see me fading,
you'll just drink past all the time.
And when I beg that you stop fading,
I'll just sleep until it's blind.
your blind.
your blind.
you are blind.
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ooo, pretty! (: I really like this song! There were a few grammatical errors that I'll overlook for now, because the most important part of this is really the words and lyrics. They seem to flow fairly well!
good job, keep writing!
-mcbeff
It often becomes challenging to interpret lyrics without the melody or pace of the song but the title of this piece caught my attention. What kept me reading was your emotion.
Those two excerpts illustrate the level of emotion these lyrics radiate. I especially liked when you wrote, "We both feel no feelings," as it was clearly opposite to the emotion of the lyrics and hence provided that sense of teenage drama in the sense that both parties have hidden feelings which may or may not vary. A very interesting song to say the least.
Sincerely,
-Elitehusky
Hey there! I loved these lyrics, I think my favourite line was 'Your World's a white cloud.' I really loved that.
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Some of the lines don't quite flow properly, but apart from that, it's great!
( Hehe, I'm a newbie too, welcome to YWS
hey, heybeccahey! NEWBIE! XDDDD (here on YMS we like to scare, stalk, and welcome new people!)
Anyways back to the review! I liked this, although some of it was confusing. You might want to re-phrase some of the things you said. But I loved this line "Chemicals are your bloodstream, and I don't care now,"
Over all I liked these lyrics they where good XD
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