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This is ok... It would be better with more emotion... I think.. I can't put my finger on what would make it better. Oh well. Keep writing, Alzora

I don't think this poem needs much work, it's really nice the way it is. One thing though - are you talking about your friend, or are you talking about ...

Aaah!! This poem is so cute! I love it the way it's short, sweet and simple. The ryhming makes it even better (I stink at rhyming...)!! Keep writing!! Alzora

I like this poem, it's kind of vague though... I think it could be great if you added some stanzas onto it! Keep writing, Alzora

Wow, this is awesome. I'd love to read the rest of it!! *Sighs* To bad you haven't finished it yet... Keep writing! Alzora

This is an ok poem. I feel it doesn't have much emotion... I like emotion, a lot. Also this line is a bit awkward: More, More, More! It doesn't seem ...

This is so cool, I like how it subtly rhymes. It's got nice descriptions too. Be proud :) Keep writing, Alzora

I didn't understand this poem at all. No idea what it was about... Everything seemed to have been mixed together in a blender... Good luck! Alzora

This is a cool poem! I like the way you used black horses. Keep writing, Alzora

Thanks for editing!! I revised my poem, is it better now?

Gah!! I don't really like the way you keep using "dark and deadly" it get boring... quickly. The rest of the poem is ok. Keep writing, Alzora

This is a cool poem. I don't really have any nitpicks. By the way - welcome to YWS!! Keep writing! Alzora