Published December 16, 2010
Parts of this are from a song my best friend 
and I wrote, others I wrote:
You don't say it directly but we get your point,
It's all about you, it's not about us.
We want to be friends, but you won't allow that.
We're missing kindness, you used to give us.
We'll always be there, if you're there for us.
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Thanks for the reviews guys!
The one thing I noticed was all the "us"s at the end, couldn't you think of different endings? Overall, I liked the poem and couldn't find anything else wrong, so yeah. I like it but perhaps you could elaborate a bit more on this idea, add more, describe the poem
I liked the poem, though it seems kind of crude. The best thing I liked was your simplicity.
I like this poem, it's kind of vague though... I think it could be great if you added some stanzas onto it!
Keep writing,
Alzora
I think this is a really nice little poem
I've only got one point really;
Not completely sure what this line is meant to say? I might just be missing it but I can't quite see the point you're trying to make. Hope this has been helpful to you!
Yay I wrote that with you XD
But cupcake you should have it in lyrics O_o