Justagirl

This is a very heartwarming piece! You should go through it, however, and capitalize all the "I"'s and look for other spelling, capitalization, or grammar mistakes, as there are quite ...

Picked you like raisins, This is a bit of a weird line... You like my humour. I like yours as well. This is a bit off-topic when you were just ...

Friends were all we were, You used 'friends' twice, making it a bit repetitive in this line. Other than what I just pointed out, I loved this! Your flow was ...

It all happened on that – that cursed day; the day nations finally revealed it’s true colors. This should be either 'It all happened on that – that cursed day; ...

Ok, well. Nice first poem, I'd say. I'm not gong to go through and point out every little thing I find wrong with it, unless you want me to. In ...

This is a great poem, James :D I think that it could be a bit better with some imagery in it, though, and definitely more punctuation. A poem is not ...

The boy, Jake, had a set of tiny, well placed bite marks marring his neck. So, they're vampires or something of the sort, right? Well then, bite marks seems ungraceful ...

Along the way, glimmers of civilisation flashed before our eyes; lonesome, decrepit houses, isolated farms, where we knocked and received no answer, scrawny chickens and bony cows wandering about mean

You can't escape it, but you can overcome it. Well, if you overcome oxygen, you might just die. Actually, you'll just pass out and then your body will immediately/automatically start ...

Hi there, Rose! I think this is a really nice poem, but you need a bit of work on it. You were really quite wordy in it (which is ok, ...

that I have a problem - I think it is (I wasn't exactly sure what you were trying to say in this line, but it the correct wording could be ...

' Oh no! ' Git said ' I must move with haste ' He bit the Russians , Them stupid communists , And bit the Americans , Those white trash ...

Hi there! I know you already seem to have a ton of reviews but when I read this, I felt the need to give feedback (don't worry, it's not a ...

as its scent ' s This was a very powerful poem, as far as you can go with power in relation to anorexia. I really liked reading it although it ...

The clouds fall from the sky I feel there should be some sort of punctuation here, don't you? i n pieces, soft and white covering the ground i n a ...