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I've just come back to this poem and have quickly looked over it and added a few bit and changed some other points. Any more suggestions? Are my new stanzas ...

I know that I am also really late on replying to this, but it really did have me gripped. You told it excellently with just the right amount of description. ...

I love how you have written this. Especially with the fact that you've used rhyme. Very good.

I really liked this. As others have said; I'm not sure of the tenses, but it's a really lovely short poem. Hope to see more work like this. :)

Have added punctuation, plus editted a few more bits. I'm really unsure on the first stanza; but don't know how it can be bettered?

I really like this. Although perhaps the stanza with the least imagery; the second stanza is my favourite. It's very truthful and I like that.

I'm afraid I have to agree with everyone about the cliches. Something with more originality would have been better. I think I have the same issue with the "poor me" ...

Have made lots of edits to the poem. What do you now think?

The secret is depression. I'm going to rework it later and post it again.. Thanks for the feedback though, it's really useful..

I really liked this. The use of the first person is really good, allowing the thoughts and emotions to come across well. Please post more..

I really enjoyed reading this. Have little else to say as it is very good. Well Done :)

I really enjoyed reading this. The emotion is shown so clearly which allows the reader a good understanding of everything that's going on. Well done.

I really like this. I agree with everyone else :)

I really like the imagery in this. It's simple but sharp. Nothing else to add, the strict format leaves it hard to add anything else!

I really like this. Good use of a range of adjectives and verbs. Not any real rhythm but if that's not necessary to the poem then that's fine. Can't really ...