Juniper

Hi, Madhatter! Welcome to YWS! So, to start, I want to say that this is an excellent poem (despite the criticism-filled comments I am about to make! :P) and I ...

Hey Flower! June here! (Have I mentioned that you're getting better at poetry? :P) Okay, to start! My first thing is punctuation. I think that this poem can handle a ...

Hey Bow Love! I'm June, your critic for the moment. ;) Welcome to YWS, by the way. To be honest, you had a wonderful rhyme scheme going throughout this with ...

Hey Fading dream, I'm June! The grave sits awkwardly on this silent hill, Stands tall and proud yet crooked and wrong. No one visits this dead soul, Even the wind ...

Hey Flower! I think this poem was good on the expression front, because it seems as if you've poured your thoughts into this. I have to say, it had a ...

Hi! As Kiki dear has said, there's a lot of mistakes here. Each dialogue string should begin with a capital letter. A few times throughout this, you use U instead ...

Whoa! Hey there! June here! Phantom has pointed out most of the nit picks I would have touched on, so I'll stick to an overall. I really like the way ...

So, Sakura, I think this is a decent story start, but to be honest, I don't like it too much. I don't like the descriptions; they're too heavy. I strongly ...

Hi, Will! This was very cute! For being made-up on-the-spot, this was definitely excellent. I really liked the rhyme you used; it suited this piece well, and didn't come off ...

Hey, Love! I think this song was rather nice, but since I do not know what type of music it's to be set to, I cannot really critique this. However! ...

Hey Selin! June here! I think that this is a fairly, fairly decent poem, that holds a lot of potential. However! I think it could use some polishing, dear. Like ...

Hey Mandey! I found this poem pretty similar to your other poem, in a rhyming sense. Your rhyme scheme is decent, but it is definitely not the best, seeing as ...

Miss Ching! This was an excellent poem, although one could argue that it's depressing. :P Towards the end you throw some hope in, which makes it exceptional. :P I love ...

Roooosey! You know, I don't really do long reviews unless I really, really like something. But then, lots of times I can't find anything to say. :P Slow rhythm, never ...

Hi Hailey! June here! I think this is a decent, short piece, but to be honest, I think it's kind of lacking a strong pull of emotion, or a strong ...