JunePearl

Hey there! You guys did so well, it's a beautiful poem. "Make us forget our past" Not sure if this is on purpose, like you're asking the wind to make ...

Nice job. It's great how you can hear the story in the song. It definitely sounds like a rap song, and has a great flow. It really is like a ...

Hello @blueca! It's very captivating. It sounds like a very solemn farewell, and one that leaves you to interpret it for yourself. It really puts you in deep thought. I, ...

Hey there @TheOffBroadwayAuthor It's a beautiful little story. There's so much emotion and description. It's almost as thought I'm actually there. As far as I can tell there aren't any ...

Hello spunkyspacekitty! I really like it! It's very exciting, and interesting. Just a few things that could be clarified. Who died exactly? Was it just the colonists or Private Hugh? ...

Hey there Iloveharleyguinn03! I am quite intrigued, and curious as to who Jonah is. So I would say that is a good place to end. However, this is a very ...

Hi EditorandPerks! I want to start by saying, I love all the description. I almost feel like I'm in the mountains myself! Also, none grammatical errors jumped out at me ...

Hello there Vaibhav! Someone has already corrected some of your grammatical errors, but there are still quite a few left. You are mostly missing punctuation marks, and a few spaces ...

Hi Spacekitty! I enjoyed reading the story, and as you already know, I love happy endings. I consider it to be very impressive that you managed to make an interesting ...

My opinion totally isn't biased because I'm your friend or anything, well maybe a little biased. Anyways, you did a fantastic job! I really enjoyed reading it, and it reminds ...

Hello! I'm new to this website, so I'm going to give this a try. Over-all this was a nice story, and I would say that I did enjoy this. I ...