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Unless you’re tyring to loose weight lose. Strangely, there’s an awful lot to get rid of seeing as our relationship was neither long nor prosperous there's an awful lot to ...

Every year at the begging of the summer I no longer add corrections btw, just point out the mistake. and he put forth no extra energy put forth in frivolous ...

You are ridiculously talented for your age. This was a fantastic continuation of the first piece, and in my opinion one of the better works I've seen on this site ...

Fresh air will do you go As usual, very well written, flows nicely too, with the rest. I'll just say that I would have liked the periphal vision thing, to ...

I'll tell you what, I was pleasantly surprised by this. It was extremely well written, especially for your age! - Which I have to doubt now, lol. It had a ...

[spoiler]I think that the only clunky part to the book, and the bit that confused me the most, was when Harry went into the pensieve. Now bear with me on ...

I disagree, I liked it very much, but at the same time its a familiar feel-these musings that is, much like what you hear from many a wearied immortal character, ...

Hm. How interesting, I have the exact opposite view. In that, I think the fantasy saved the piece, which, as a thriller/horror piece was not very good. Don't get me ...

I must admit to some disappointment at what was, ultimately, a flawlessly executed but not very engaging text. I was looking forward to the fantasy element; I think, unlike some, ...

Nice work over all, but comma's kill this piece: Ravin lay, perfectly awake, on his mattress This kind of halting sentence is common throughout the story and it just about ...

the soft plink of the bullet contacting the can? contacting is such an odd word to use here. It definetly halted the flow for me, and so early on, thats ...

I've hear quite a lot about you and your detective work I've heard quite a lot... alternately, iI hear quite a lot...

This was written well, flowed nicely, and as the others have already mentioned has a beautiful arabian, but more importantly, timeless feel to it. Something thats important in fantasy, which ...

Well, this was certainly different. There were a few errors to be sure, but it was solid for the most part. Not entirely sure how I feel about the content, ...

Ah, stylistic, technical issues aside, I kind of liked this. If only because I have my own Santa related story coming to a forum near you lol. At least, I ...