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Hola! I'll say from the outset that I didn't like the italicised parts. Mostly, I think its a great technique, but mostly misused here. The repetition gets really annoying. Run, ...

For one thing, I think you should remove all the periods and commas from this piece. In some poems, it works, here, it halts the flow. I stepped on an ...

But I pray my blazen words shall haunt I think you mean 'brazen' - blazen isn't a word. But I feel the strings of history pulling in my favor., I ...

Exactly my brand of heroine. Do you mean heroin? As in the drug, or heroine? As in the female hero? I found the repetition of 'Pain is like a drug ...

... Seriously? Well, er, welcome to YWS. I think you need some help with this. I just wrote an article that might be of some help - for beginning writers ...

Allo, allo! Creep rose up on shaky legs, body covered in [s]the[/s] gore [s]of The Nail[/s], berserker mindset already falling away[s]again[/s]. Unless your readers suffer from Alzheimer's, it's unlik

Who is willing to give a fatherly role, on a walk to the beauty way. Chanting and bluffing towards our own sunset A paradise of a modern struggle This stanza ...

amidst the daze the life was born I think that should be "a" life. I found the repetition of phrase and the formulaic structure to be unimaginative and boring. This ...

Hm. It seems to me as though there is a story here, but its one I mostly missed. It takes a place in a school; there is a progression of ...

The nun worked the simple latch and [s]then[/s] swung the gate open on rusty hinges [s]that screamed into the relative silence of the night. [/s] I let you get away ...

Haha, discrimination! There are plenty of major Australian fantasy writers though: Ian Irvine Trudi Canavan Kim Wilkins Tad Williams Garth Nix Sara Douglass Fiona McIntosh Kate Forsyth Tony Shillitoe

Hola, Inky! The Curse of the Verbose The moon peeked her head through [s]a break in[/s] the thick ominous clouds to shine [s]her silver light[/s] over the forested land below ...

Momma’s out in[s]to[/s] the garden with Jackson watchi' the sky out in the garden with Jackson, watchin' the sky. As far as dialects go, I've always known the words to ...

The swift smell of Forget-Me-Not flowers rose my senses in a pleasant way Eh? How can a smell be swift? And I think you meant 'rose to my senses' - ...

Oh,I could set my watch by it. space after the comma Didn't we have a box of cookies?Or did I eat them all?" another space P.S. We're dying. Who is ...