Jericho

Hello. I'm not one for lengthy introductions. Let's start. First, you must separate your dialogue and descriptions in a sensical manner. As it is, it is incredibly difficult to follow ...

Hello. I'm not one for lengthy introductions; allow me to start the review. To begin: you have a very short time to catch my attention (or, in fact, any reader's ...

Hello again! To start off this chapter, I feel like—from the beginning—you could do a better job of showing us Kaisar's repulsion at someone else touching him, rather than effectively ...

Hello! Well, you know why I'm here (I would hope), so allow me to start on this review. Starting from the beginning (as people normally do), your first paragraph feels ...

I'm glad to be reviewing you on such a fine day; allow me to start with a small critique. Somewhere along the lines of posting this, it seems your formatting ...

Hello. I thought I'd weigh in on this. For the most part, my critique will go in order of importance (emphasizing what I believe you could most or least improve), ...

Hello again; This chapter thankfully continues and perhaps even improves upon the quality of your writing from the chapter before, but no writing, no matter how good, is free from ...

Hello; Firstly, I would like to say that this piece is intriguing. It's interesting, and it makes me want to read more, so I can't say that it doesn't work ...

Hello! First of all, I find this chapter intriguing and definitely worth my while to read. It's curious, and it piques that spot in the human soul where curiosity meets ...