Jenthura

SethWes, obviously you've never read Edgar Allen Poe's The Raven , a truly grim story even without meddling with it. Hmmm, which is what you seem to have done, SassyKat. ...

“204 N.R. – THE YEAR OF THE REVOLUTION (?)” What's with the questions mark? I'm pretty sure a newspaper wouldn't publish something like that. The wind, blowing against him, only ...

Because you wrote it when you were five, I can't really critique it too harshly, now can i? ;) Suffice to say that you had a very active imagination back ...

Micki, this is magnificent.....just...wonderful. To quote the reviewer directly above me, it had a "gentle and swift feel": perfect words to describe this. I almost don't wanna do this, but ...

Hey, Xregion. You've got a nice story here, but it's not really 'Other Poetry'. Next time, be sure to choose the correct genre. Also, it's quite a wall of daunting ...

Azi! This is amazing! About the only mistake I found was not yours. After and before (respectively) the places where the grandfather's actions take over the letter changes to talk ...

You know, RH, the only problem I have with your story is accepting the fact that Daria has so readily agreed to go with the group on the shallow excuse ...

Hmm, it's really great, it introduces and explains both characters in a very short time. Kudos on that. However, it feels like an excerpt from something else, as though you're ...

Go away an come back later. I'm not speaking to yous right now. Other than those two mistakes, you did great! I love this piece so much I *liked* it. ...

About the only thing I found wrong was the fact that it was much too short and quick. Not fast-paced, just...over too quickly. If I knew I was going to ...

First of, all, I must warn you that I didn't read parts 1 and 2, so I'm basing all my critiques on what I've read here. Anyways, you've done a ...

The knife calls you, stained in blue reminiscent of your 'Waves.' But you turn away cutting those strings, This is the only part I don't understand, Lavs. I can get ...

“Just hand me that towel, will you?” This beginning is very abrupt. Your opening sentence should be something that pulls the reader in and makes them want to read more. ...

First of all: SORRY SORRY SORRY SORRY! This chapter took me forever, but at least I managed, right? I’m going to save my comments about Violet’s death ( :’( ) ...

Hi, Adoxa..um..graph…er…Hi! :D I really liked what you’ve written, and really like the poem. However, I have a few comments and nitpicks… "Nothing Gold Can Stay," I read aloud to ...