An Inopportune Visit From Inspiration

by fireheartedkaratepup

Published May 15, 2011

In Short stories



This is now part of my e-book.  I left the other half up, and if you'd like to read this again you can just ask, really, but I thought this was a smarter business decision. :P

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freewritersavvy
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freewritersavvy commented Comment · May 15, 2011

Love it! That sounds like me! Ha,ha!

Other then the 'yous' that needs to be 'you' I did not see any mistakes.

Keep Writing,
~FW~

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Jenthura
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Jenthura wrote a review Review · May 15, 2011

Go away an come back later. I'm not speaking to yous right now.


Other than those two mistakes, you did great! I love this piece so much I *liked* it. :D
Oh, but also:

I don't care if you're not a dog!


What does that mean? Anyways, regardless of your intended meaning, it would still sound better as this: "I don't care if you aren't a dog!"
Or does it? :? Hmm, not really in a reviewing mood right now. :(
Regretfully,
Jenth

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Taria commented Comment · May 15, 2011

I just had to tell you, that made my day^^
Describes my weekend perfectly!



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