Jenthura

NO ONE ELSE HAS SEEN THE SUN FROM WHERE WE LIE NOW COME AND RESCUE US Initially, I thought it was: Come and rehcuecus. You see, I mixed up the ...

Tears, you can make this into a novel (each chapter being in its own thread) and a link will appear to every reader, giving them the entire list of chapters. ...

Hey, Rocksmith, a nice bit of work here, but you definitely could polish it a bit more. For one, the title has something to do with some bartender named Brombil, ...

I want this review to be a nice big long ‘Thank you” to you, Amy. I tried pretty hard, but I’m not that great at it. Plus, I did it ...

Awesome! I've got to say, I've never really been interested in any sort of Vampire writing, but this is way different. OK, down to business. I liked Josh's personality a ...

Hey Z! I promise to do a review soon, keep looking at this spot for it! EDIT: The dust clung to him as he walked on through the streets of ...

Wow. I don't know what to say, the whole thing is weird. I caught on quickly that she was high, but was confused further by the weirdness of the 'eye ...

There is a slim chance... that something will go wrong... and me and Gregory won't be together forever. It’s ‘Gregory and I’, not ‘me and Gregory’. Just a simple grammatical ...

Eraqio said: It was all very bittersweet, like, yeah you had great memories, but there was always some thorn just off screen snagging you or your friend. Yes, I agree, ...

First off, I have no idea where the story is going, or where it came from, but this scene by itself is awesome! It very funny, reminds myself of my ...

First off, welcome to YWS! Hmm, it's a bit confusing towards the beginning, since you cut it up all into pieces, even more so when there was a large amount ...

Hey, this isn't finished yet, but I'll post more later. So far so good... After breaking up the longest relationship in his life, he began to walk back over the ...

Hey, what can I say? It's a little...short. Also, the whole vampire thing is way too clichéd nowadays. Unless you can come up with something far different and original (which ...

Wow, a massive block of text. It makes the story hard to read, and can often intimidate the reader. Try separating the paragraphs with another space, or even separating every ...

Hey Donny, first off, welcome to YWS. Secondly...good work here, but frankly, it's too long. Try cutting it up into chapters, or parts. You'll intimidate your reader with all that ...