Don't Hate The Gamer Scene Two

I really like how you're visualizing the stage at the beginning of this scene (the yell of "WITCH!" crossing over from the living room to the girls at the mall)! Playing with space like this is one of my favorite parts of theater =)

I'm still having trouble liking the characters. To me, all the boys seem like ungrateful jerks and all the girls seem like high-maintenance brats. Of course, they might all start out that way, but maybe one or two of them will have a redeeming quality by the final act? For instance, at least Evan says "please" in this scene (though I thought it was Arty who had asked for it?).

I'd definitely recommend that you kick up the action/plot develpment. Maybe cut right to the concert? If something big happens in between, it's likely that you can integrate it into this scene anyway.

I also like that you're considering what people are doing in the background. For example, while Arty and Michaela are chatting near the beginning of the scene, Michaela drops her bag and reorients herself in the room. I don't want to encourage too much over-directing, but I'd say the more of this the better. Otherwise, it's all too easy to end up with talking heads sitting around a television. Is there anything someone can do in the background that maybe foreshadows events further along in the story?

Good luck as you continue! These projects are always so exciting

Hey there, I reviewed Scene One, I figured I would come back for a second taste!

We've been gone for for hours,

Of course we've moved Micky.

First off, I have no idea where the story is going, or where it came from, but this scene by itself is awesome! It very funny, reminds myself of my own obsession with video games, and ends very nicely with that last 'Witch!' touch. I'm going off to read part one now!
*Likes*