Jennafina

I like the rhythm of your poem, but coupled with the rhyme, I found very distracting. I had to read your poem two times: once to listen to the sound ...

Hey, welcome to YWS! A couple things: 1. It's a bad idea to put your full name on the internet. All sorts of scary things could happen. I edited it ...

Snoink, dear, I saved my six hundredth review for you. one hundred nineteen thousand words. I think you should make this a more specific number, to match the specific time. ...

Hey, Grif! It's great to see you're writing! This looks like a storybook post, and not just because Alden is the main character. It doesn't have much of a beginning, ...

This was interesting, but at the end I was left with a definite sense of, "Okay... so what?" Maybe I just have no sense of humor. xP The knife fell ...

Hey, Brad! I remember your first draft of Chionophobia started out with a sex scene. The conversation this starts out with is interesting, but it doesn't have the same, off ...

Hey, MH! Nice story. The way you start the story draws me in immediately. I'm curious as to why the boy is cutting himself. I think the description of the ...

Writer's Corner is for talking about your writing. Since this is your story, not a discussion of it, it goes in the Fiction Forums. PM me if you have questions! ...

This is amazing! You have died, a monument that no one cares for because of your sagging lips and bitten-down fingernails. I think this would sound better, "You have died, ...

Hey Auth! First, this is a poem, not prose. Prose is like a book. For me, the main problem with this was that I've heard it before. Not exactly the ...

You need a title! "..." is not okay. If you can't can't can't think of one, not even a bad one, at least call it "Untitled." everything turned to black. ...

Hey, Emma! Welcome to YWS. Just a couple things. Before you post your own literary works, you should try and review at least two of other people's. If you post ...

I don't think this is bad. You've got an interesting point; I haven't heard it before. It sounds a little preachy, but I think you could fix that by expanding ...

This confused me, a bit. The narrator seems to be complaining about feeling numb, but then there's this: I don't want to feel a thing. So is the narrator feeling ...

Hey! Thanks for the PM. :D The girl on the swing flew up and down as the wind coiled her braids like a wedding gown. This rhymes, and doesn't make ...