Jayce

Hi there, Prim! The imagery is what hits home for me. You get me going at the beginning with a poignant metaphor. The body -> baggage and thoughts -> contents ...

Hi there. I think there are some good ideas here, but they're tangled in your awkward sentence structuring. All of your verses are worded strangely, which hinders the flow of ...

The thing I like about this piece is how abstract it is. You use simple language and pinpointed descriptions to illustrate several coalescing ideas. Your central message isn't really clear ...

Holy cow. I have to say; you did a great job with this. Death is a tough topic, especially when it's regarding someone close to you. I'm really sorry for ...

This was sweet. The way you began the poem really captured my attention. You talk about being a thief of rocks and compare it to the way this other person ...

Your first stanza is strong. I like the rhyme pattern, which is why I was a little disappointed when you didn't continue that all the way through the piece. But ...

You have a nice piece here. The anchor metaphor is my favorite part. It really showcases your knack for roping in the reader with figurative language. Nothing you write is ...