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Hey :D This seems strangely familiar to me, lol. I think that you should write longer entries to keep the reader interested. While reading this, there were a few bits ...

Hey, I just wanted to say Italy definitely fought in WWII. I'm like a WWII nerd and they fought with the allies. Maybe you can have Jojo say Switzerland or ...

Hey, First of all, welcome to YWS. Next, your actual review. Red=Things I don't like Blue=Things I want to comment on Green: Things I liked “Isabelle! If you don’t get ...

Hey! I don't mean to be rude but this could have been much better. It was good prose and had good sentence structure but it was a tad boring. I ...

A car was riding with intense speed then it crashed. The car felt sad, he thought he was a terrible driver and he was but he didn't see the thing ...

Hey, Again amazing job! Darn. When you go to reveiw something, you expect to find some nitpick or plot whole or something to fix up but with this I found ...

Hey. I saw this on the new posts and decided to check it out. So far, really good. I wouldn't say that if I didn't mean it. I like the ...

Er. That was certainely interesting. Lol. It made me laugh at the randomness. You should of had Homer Simpson in that though. It was funny. My favorite line: EDWARD OFF ...

This reminded me of the Taylor Swift song, I'd Lie a little. :) I really like it. It was honest. It was raw. However, it wasn't realistic. She never spoke ...

Woah :) This was amazing! The meter matched every time and I would normally say that the continous aaaa rhyme pattern is annoying but here it fit. However, I did ...

Hey, This is good writing but no offense it is too much like the Hunger Games. Maybe it will change later on but for now, it's just....I don't know.... I ...

Hey, I'm sorry but I really don't understand anything that's going on. I can't tell whose the mother, father, son or anything. I can't tell the time period because of ...

BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! THAT WAS PURE AMAZINGNESSSSSSS!!!! HAHAHA!! MY FRIEND IS OVER AND WE WERE JUST BOTH SINGING ALONG TO IT!!! HAHA! SHE'S PUTTING THE TIK-TOK KARAOKE AND WE'RE ABOUT TO SING ...

Hey, Before even reading it, I think it would be better to make these in individual chapters. Reading it in one go, is slightly over whelming and the words seem ...

Hey, This was a nice start but I think some changes need to take place. 1. You have to explain the presidency murder-kidnapping or whatever more. The president is constantly ...