JaneThermopolis

I actually loved Wicked, so when I read this, I was really surprised that even though you said that you were making fun of it, I found it highly entertaining. ...

Pretty interesting poem...cute too... But unfortunately...I've got a couple nit-picks... "Her diluted dreams drift and pass in the air does she dream of me?" There should be a period between ...

I thought this was a really cute story, though we really don't get any information about the characters, we do know that there's a girl who really really likes this ...

I don't really know why, but I didn't really enjoy the piece very much. I did like these lines though: "Like a rock, you only saw the soft part on ...

This definitely has a raw and real feeling behind it, however, if you want it to be lyrics for a song it really needs to have a chorus, some verses, ...

Nice poem! I liked how, at first, I didn't actually get what the poem was about, but as you get towards the end and read the last stanza, I finally ...

1st - Congrats for having this on the featured list! Pretty cool for someone who's reasonably new!! 2nd - I like that you praised Alyssa's personality. I know I personally ...

Interesting story..I did not see the part where she tells Pace she "has 6 kids" coming..however, I think this story is a bit predictable. By the title, you can tell ...

The poem is ok, but I think there are a couple of things you might need to work on. I liked the first two paragraphs, but this one, I think, ...

I really like this story. I like the crook's interesting personality, and you also left me wondering why he killed Emilie and what he did with her diary. This descriptions ...

Nice poem! It was pretty good, but there were some places where commas weren't needed. I also didn't like the part where you repeated "drift", even though it was separated ...

I really liked this haiku. Haikus are meant to be simple, but strike a chord with a reader, and you struck the chord with me. This will also definitely strike ...

I agree with the two previous posts, you might need to change a couple of the lines in the poem so it makes more sense, but this was a very ...

Like Esther said, this story really has potential. However....I believe that you have the right roots in place. It sort of seemed like you developed an outline with all of ...