Turn the antenna,
Radio fills with music,
Listen to the song.
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I really liked this haiku.
Haikus are meant to be simple, but strike a chord with a reader, and you struck the chord with me.
This will also definitely strike a chord with people who love music.
But I think you definitely did a good job with this poem. It's short and to the point, and that's what haikus are also all about.
Good job,
Jane.
Call me a traditionalist, but I don't know if I completely "get" this modernized haiku style. Generally (as far as I know), haiku deal with more natural themes, such as the seasons, weather, plants/animals, etc.
However, I don't pretend to be an expert on the subject, and neither will I attempt to give advice as if I were. If that's what you're looking for (expert advice, that is), I suggest going to http://www.toyomasu.com/haiku. These guys are the pros.