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Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 3
Hello! Thank you for telling me this is up! Looks like it's been up for some time, and I haven't noticed. Sorry 'bout that. ^^; Grammar and First Impressions His ...
Jun 11, 2008 -
Re: Something Odd
Hello! Welcome to YWS! I thought I would stop by and take a peek at what you've presented us! :D First, let me share our wonderful Eleven Commandments of YWS ...
Jun 9, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 2
Hi again! I'm back from supper, so I shall type up this critique now! :D Sorry for the quick closure of the last critique. If you have any questions, you ...
Jun 9, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 1
Hello! Thanks for PMing about this! I'd be more than happy to critique this for you! :wink: Grammar and First Impressions My sweater is only a thin barrier against the ...
Jun 8, 2008 -
Re: Rainbows and Roses
Hi, JFW! Grammar and First Impressions “Meagan!” my mom calls from deep within the house, her voice bouncing off the high ceilings, [no comma] and [s]the[/s] wooden walls. Sounds better. ...
Jun 8, 2008 -
Re: The Silencer (1)
Hello! Thought I'd stop by and take a peek at what you've presented us! :D Grammar and First Impressions In the darkness, the citizens of Auzstine couldn’t tell [s]what[/s] which ...
Jun 8, 2008 -
Re: One love, One art
Hello, Eimear! Sorry it took me a moment to get to this; I had a prior commitment, but we're all good now. Let's get this show on the roll! 8) ...
Jun 7, 2008 -
Re: Where You Will End Up, #1-3 /P
Brad! I feel honored you asked me for a review! I shall do my best to give you a full-out critique of which I promised. :wink: I'm going to copy ...
Jun 7, 2008 -
Re: Murder (pt. 1)
Hello, and welcome to YWS! :D The woman who now sat on the other side of the table with her was a small Latina woman, [no comma] with dark curly ...
Jun 7, 2008 -
Re: Dreaming
Easy! Grammar and First Impressions I am standing on a beach, where instead of sand I squish my toes into smooth, blue, crystal like pebbles. This sounds clunky and could ...
Jun 7, 2008 -
Re: The Escapist
Hello! Welcome to YWS! I am Jabber, and I will be your critic for the next however long it will take! My first act for today is reference to the ...
Jun 7, 2008 -
Re: The Séance
3B! It makes me happy you posted in my review thread 'cause I was going to read this anyway. :lol: I just enjoy your writing that much. *stretches arms out* ...
Jun 7, 2008 -
Re: Catching Casey
Hello! Welcome to YWS, seeing as I haven't welcomed you in your first post; and if I did, well double-welcome! :D Grammar and First Impressions I'm going to hopefully skip ...
Jun 7, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Prologue
Hello! I thought I'd stop by and see what you've got here, especially if you're so certain it's not our typical vampire romance. :wink: Grammar and First Impressions I breathe ...
Jun 6, 2008 -
Re: Luna
Hello, and welcome to the lovely YWS! I am me, your critic for this moment. For my first act, I would like to inform you of what's called the Two ...
Jun 6, 2008