IrishFire18

This is really beautiful. I like how you used that metaphor -- the snake and the silence. It made it really interesting. It was sad, and a little scary. But ...

Thanks! I wasn't really going for a story or anything, just.... I don't know. Some loose fluff to get emotions off my chest. This was my way of doing it. ...

I'm breathless. This was really, truly touching. All I can say, is that this is simply beautiful. Simply, wonderfully, beautiful. -Fire

While this is an interesting start, I am very sorry to say that it is too short to review properly. Perhaps, once added to, I will be able to write ...

I put that much passion into my stories from what I feel in my heart. Honestly, this story came from a song, a broken heart, and a word war. When ...

It's funny you should say that, about Mumford and Son's song. That's where the inspiration came from. (:

I think this was absolutely beautiful. The simplicity is what really brings it all together. The powerful meaning behind what you said... Simply wow. I'm impressed. :) Keep writing, Fire.

This is beautiful, Lumi. Simply beautiful. (: Well done. -Fire

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I won't review this, MorningDew, because it's highly inappropriate, vulgar, and cheap. I also think it's a great big joke on your part to be thirteen and writing things like ...

I think I'm in love with this piece. Ink has already said all the suggested fixes, so I will say this; brilliant job. It's completely beautiful. Yes, Thomas is deliciously ...

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Wow. Just.... Uhm... Wow. It was well written... but to write about something so personal and vulgar... and in such detail.... It stuns me. Really, it does. I would expect ...

I did have the lines and stanzas in there, I promise! This always happens when I submit something. But thank you! (: I tried my best.

I really loved this piece, but I got confused when you switched back and forth between past tense and present tense. Maybe I missed something, but I didn't understand it. ...