Insomnia

Hey Sieg. I thought I'd start again and comment as I went through, so here I am. ;) They could really go places.” Chuckled That doesn't need to be a ...

Hey Clau! I have to agree with Writer over there: if you were going for disturbing, unnerving, then you got it. There were only a few really minor things, most ...

Well, you've got me a bit confused with with re-writes but I'll get it straight eventually lol. Jamie threw here uneaten sandwich away and stepped back into the room, *her ...

Hey, Fluffy. :) As prologues go, this was really good. It isn't about the length, it's about trying to intrigue your writer from the very beginning. Which you've done here. ...

I don't know if I can comment fairly because I can't write second person (Only ever tried third once or twice!). But personally, I liked it. I actually enjoyed it. ...

I think you have a nicely developed set of characters that you should expand upon. ;) It was entertaining. I'll admit, I didn't actually laugh properly, but it is a ...

Hey! I enjoyed this a lot. As Jessica said, it flows well. I could only find one real errror: and rubbed it on himself as not to attract more with ...

I disn't think it was flimsy. :o I thoguht it showed some genuine emotion. I mean, how many people these days have respect for people who drink tea and talk ...

Yeah. I read The latest one last weekend (along with like four other books lol!). And it has some good jokes, don't forget those. I can still remember the Marilyn ...

Even if you didn't get it all right, it still hit home pretty well. I don't know why I lvoe court situations so much! But according to what everyone else ...

I really liked the books. I actually thought that the exclamation marks added a lot. There was usually some sort of twist at the end. I always made myself finish ...

-plays some high speed symphony- ;) The suspense is building! Up to the big day now. I can't wait for the actual trial. Probably because my favourite show's Boston legal ...

Hey again. :) I'm annoyed now because there's no more to read. It was good having a heap to get through. Only one thing I could find this time, and ...

Her heart speed, *sped And I hate saying this to a person in a comma This made me laugh for a while! :) *coma I wont see you when I ...

Hey again! :) Just got back from holiday. I was thinking about getting back to this while I was gone. Good sign. ;) Anybody walking down the street would either ...