Incandescence

I don't understand your poetry. It's okay, you can go ahead and break it on down to my level.

:wretches in nearby trash can:

The world "also," I believe, was placed there because this is a heavily modified version of an older poem. And I suppose it is for another person, which is why ...

This poem left me with the question: What? The last line didn't fit and was totally incoherent with the rest of the poem. As for the rest of the poem, ...

You had some lines here that really had a good flow/rhythm to them. Others were very disjointed and didn't fit in. You have a good concept and a strong closing ...

It's a work of fiction. The Fountainhead is also excellent. In fact, all of her books are good. The best was For The New Intellectual: The Virtue of Selfishness. Personally, ...

I can relate. I don't think anyone can really give critiques of a haiku, though. They're too short for emotion and before you've said all that's needed to be said, ...

Syntax is the order and selection of words in a poem. Frost had some poems where he demonstrated exemplar understanding of syntax. e.e. cummings also had an amazing mastery of ...

You didn't need to explain to us what the poem's point was. I think most people could figure it out, so take out the very first sentence, please. Vulnerability shones ...

Oh, don't get me wrong, this is a by far better poem than your recent additions. Things I would lump in with the movie about Lemony Snicket's books. This was ...

As a first time sonnet, it isn't a bad start. Good thing you made that note, otherwise I'd be laying into you. So, keep working at them. I personally don't ...

I might as well be reading Webster's dictionary...wait a minute! You stole this, didn't you! Didn't you!? I knew it...right here in the Oxford English Dictionary. You could at least ...

First draft summed this up nicely.

I remember reading this at TYWC, and it gripped me then. It's gripped me now.

This is hauntingly seductive. Beautiful yet esoteric. I think I like you.