Incandescence

Grammatically, there are few spots where you messed up, but nothing that's going to devastate this piece. The work itself is obviously not directed to a younger audience, who would ...

Oh Morgan...I liked the concept of the poem, or the impression the title left on my imagination. However, you're poems are always too literal. Not overtly literal, but just a ...

"stood by the fireplace the letters the messages the pictures the hope all of the love grasped in my hands, waiting to be burnt. " Ew. Just ew. You can ...

YOUR VERSION I watch you You have become someone new I wait, tentatively Maybe you will look at me and remember me There is no one who has not experienced ...

Not to be sardonic, but this poem is overdone. I didn't see Wulie's voice come through in it at all. Instead, I heard the voice of kids from 11 to ...

Ack! Steer away from poems about suicide, or may God help you. Because you are a new writer, I am not going to say too much, because I've nothing to ...

I have mixed emotions about this poem. I liked certain lines, and others just kind of dissipate into nothingness. You seem to have a good understanding of poetry, and are ...

This is unimpressive. I've come to expect more from you. Some of your lines (i.e. "cold empty heart") dissolve into cold empty triteness. Of course, it could be a sense ...

Get over your d*** imagery. Beautiful poetry isn't comprised of only beautiful images. This would be a lot better if you focused the point of it and dropped the goofy ...

This is a sad attempt at making fun of Christianity. If taking potshots at the validity of Mary being a virgin makes you swell with some sort of gross pride ...

This was utterly pointless. Whatever meaning it has for you, it has for you only. Your readers will pull nothing from it, and the flow of the poem is disjointed ...

I'm very leery of telling you what to change. If it means a lot to you, then I don't want to get involved, too much. The problem with the poem ...

"Because my little sister has a tumor, And I can’t do a thing Because the one I love, Is a thousand miles away, Because the song on the stereo, The ...

This poem seemed like you tried to dedicate it to one image. Don't. Good poetry comes from your heart, not your mind. Relax when you write and don't worry about ...

Very...sweet. It was flagrant, and I think you wanted that. However, the ending "despite itself," didn't quite fit. I asked myself: Did I think it was not a residence of ...