IgnisandGlacialis

Hi there, Elinor! I agree with WickedWonder: this was a very cute story, written in third person present tense, which, as WickedWonder pointed out, is a very hard 'tense' to ...

Well ... this was ... certainly intriguing. It is extremely unique and unlike anything I have ever read before. You are, without doubt, an awe-inspiring writer, and your descriptive vocabulary ...

Hi! I really liked it. The only thing I found a little confusing was that it seemed to rhyme at times, but then it sort of stopped. Apart from that, ...

Aww! I loved this poem. It is awesomely cute and light-hearted! I can also imagine this in a kids' book (: There isn't really anything to criticise, so I'm sorry ...

Wow ... that is really creepy. It's based on something your Aunt saw? That takes creepy to the summit. Anyway, I liked it. You've got talent. It was very interesting: ...

Hey, for a piece written in class, it's very good. I do like battle scenes (: they're exciting. However, it was rather rushed. You could try building on it ... ...

Hey! I liked it. Your use of descriptive language is amazing. Just a few things I'd like to point out, being a perfectionist and all that. Firstly, 'The calm sea's ...

Hey - I love it! This is a very cute short story (: I do, however, think it might have done better as a poem. You do need to watch ...

Wow! This was a great poem, and absolutely true. When we are children, we do have more hopes than despairs, even though we do know more than adults take for ...

Hey! This is only your second attempt at poetry? Wow - your use of vocabulary is amazing. It was a really pretty little poem, and it brought a smile to ...

Hi! I love the spirit you put into this poem. You've injected a lot of emotion into it: that was great. I just found it a little hard to follow ...

Hey! I loved your use of adjectives in this poem. You knitted it together really well. Apart from the 'shined = shone' thing, I picked up one other grammar mistake. ...

Er ... this was very ... interesting. Yes, I agree with other reviewers on the point that it was more a rant than a poem, but I have to say, ...

Wow. You have written this incredibly well. The emotions you portray through a poem concerning a very traumatic experience are genuine and heart-wrenching. You give a sense of helplessness and ...