Ichthys

Hello! I realise that it's been a while since you posted this, but I figured I'd drop a review anyways. Overall this is very well written, perhaps some of the ...

First Story: Your characters need to begin their journey without a clue of what happens next. When you start a horror story with the narrator describing what will occur throughout ...

For the most part, this was a very enjoyable poem. There was one aspect, however, that threw off the entire piece - the rhthym and rhyme. The changing of the ...

Ooh, I really want to know more about this mother. Now on to the plot questions: How recent exactly was this surgery? If it was further in the past, as ...

Your story reads like an epic, Marshall. I quite enjoyed Bido's combination of pluck and reflection, and how he is able to respond dynamically to all the situations he is ...

Short, simple, and effective in getting emotion across, but the understanding is jumbled, if you understand what I mean. There isn't a clear order to the message, and the grammar ...

Yay! Now I can read your story whenever I want! The prophecy does seem complicated... But it doesn't seem that bad. Why do the black swans' eyes glow, though? I ...

No! Don't give up looking, Carissa! (I really like this poem.) I want to know more about the wicked muse. She started this whole problem and we don't know a ...

Just on first glance, I would recommend using capitalization. The line breaks also feel a bit awkward at times; for instance I'd put "(nine? it's in the top ten.)" on ...

I love cats, but that aside, I greatly enjoyed this poem. The narrator is struggling between two different approaches to morality. He both wants to do whatever seems good and ...

Although this story was obviously dystopian from the beginning, the narration really sold me on the idea that being chosen was a "good" thing, or at least as good as ...

A demon hunter grandmother must be the most creative idea I've heard all day, exempting my own, of course. (Just kidding, this is unparalleled.) I love Matilda's attitude towards fast ...

Wow, I am enjoying this so far. Other than the few spelling mistakes Penn pointed out, the grammar is good, and I don't see any other mistakes. The log entries ...

Very nice poem. I especially enjoyed the alteration between concrete and AABB rhyming poetry, although the first stanza didn't rhyme. The visual impact is stunning, but I'm sure not many ...

The story was, overall, amazing, especially with the amount of research you seem to have put into it, but it could use a few tweaks. When you first brought up ...