Icaruss

I think the Icarus (hey!) thingy is keeping you from making this great. I much enjoyed the part of the story where the narrator is just thinking, and we can ...

This was nice. I almost wish the guy wouldn't grow wings (that's where this is headed, no?) and you just kept writing it as a dialogue driven school story. But, ...

Ah... I don't know. I never like things written in second-person narration because they never feel like they're really happening. They always feel like a possibility, like something that can, ...

Well, I got it. And it's great. It's a nice little short story. He's father's not really there, this guy's crazy, he wants to kill his dark side, his sinful ...

That was good. It was amusing, and enjoyable. I liked the references to "On The Waterfront" and "The Producers". Yeah, I know a lot of movies. Sorry. Anyways, the dialogue ...

Oh, the horror! Man, that's life. We all go around, and screw around. I can promise you that the thing the betrayer did to you, you'll do to a hundred ...

This I like. This I really f***ing liked. Seriously. The narrative is pitch-perfect. It's observational, non-judgemental tone just goes so well with the story. It points out facts the characters ...

First things go first as they say, so I'm gonna get right to it: this ain't no prologue. I mean, sure, it is if you want it to be. There ...

I didn't really enjoy this. I mean, it wasn't bad. The plot is intriguing, although not exactly uncommon. But the way it was written... I don't know. First of all, ...

This was good. Not my kind of thing, but I enjoyed it because it was a nice, little piece of smart fiction. Like Kylan said, the narration seemed a bit ...

Why is this here? It should be in the "Other Fiction" Category since, yeah, it's unusual, but not unusual enough not to be considered fiction. And, hey, first chapters are ...

Sorry, but I didn't like this. It was just too boring. The way you narrated, it seemed monotonous and bleak. Maybe that was your intention, I don't know, but it ...

Well... I don't know. I didn't find it that funny. The whole point of the play seems to be the narrator, and I just didn't find him that funny. I ...

Dialogue isn't real enough. I mean, really, you have to say your lines out loud and ask yourself: does anyone really speak like that? I like that you have little ...

This was funny. Satires don't have to be obvious. I mean, there's another fictional article about Bush being gay, which stops being funny because it just gets a bit silly. ...