Horisun

Alrighty, this seems interesting. I think that it's good, however, there were a few grammar errors. You forgot to uppercase "as most mortals do." And "what do you mortals want ...

New chapter! Yay! Sorry I didn't get around to reading it, I've been incredibly busy lately. It's just as good as ever! The only thing I think could be played ...

Yay! New Entry! I don't have much to say about it other than I hope that Andrelalma (Did I spell that right?) Plays some importance to the plot, and that ...

This poem was great, I love the words, and the soul in it. I didn't see much problems with it in general, however, "Let me go down to speak." had ...

Great chapter! I loved every moment of it! her Fathers reaction felt a little weird to me... But maybe that's just me. And the phrase "You look like you've been ...

This was really good, I really liked it. There wasn't much to point out, and I didn't see many grammar errors. (Though, I'm not that through) There was one line ...

Great job! I really liked it. However, your i's should've been I's, and low-light should be Low-light. Also, "that paint my screen in swirls and contrast blank walls" Should probably ...

I love this poem, the idea, and it flows nicely. However, there are a few things I'd like to point out, First of all, the use of 'old, you had ...

Yay! Next entry! Woohoo! This was a really good chapter, I didn't see too much that could be improved. There was one line that kind of bugged me, and that ...

Wow, I was pleasantly surprised when I read this! It was really good. I wasn't expecting Thanos to come into play. XD I loved every moment of it. I feel ...

Hello, Horisun here! I'd like to start by saying that I enjoyed this. It was very interesting, indeed. However, there are a few things I'd like to point out. First ...

Great chapter, I loved it a lot. I have not read the first draft, but I can tell by how good it is that it has been improved! Wait, does ...

This is super duper good, I liked it a lot! However, one thing I noticed was that you were missing quotation marks when Fate said, "I love you Eugene" Also, ...

This is really good, I enjoyed this a lot! There isn't much I think that you should change. I would have suggested that you add some more detail about the ...

First, can I say I loved this, I relate to this so, so, so much. Keep writing poems, because you're very good! (I also hope you're Okay, and that either ...