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You actually submitted something! How unprecedented. What can I say? This is brilliant. The first line hooked me and the rest reeled me in. There were very few problems I ...

Your command of language is a force to be reckoned with. Your writing is extremely clear and well expressed, and there's not much I can help with really :xd: , ...

:wink: Well, let's start by saying that you've done well starting off with mystery. A lot of people either give too much away, or make it confusing by not giving ...

This is just a quick one because I have to go back to work in 10 minutes. Only having read a little at the start, I feel that this fantasy ...

I'm not much of a poetry reader, but I enjoyed this. It had a humour to it that was refreshing amongst the slough of dark, moody poetry out there. At ...

Nice article. I'd suggest you get rid of the big text and colours because it makes it seem like you're trying too hard to get the point across. If the ...

I didn't find the character very satisfying because of the way his views changed so quickly. One moment he's saying Scratch that. They’re Christadelphians. That’s like Christian but with much ...

Napalmerski makes a good point. However, in my quest to get the most reviews today, I read some pieces longer than this with no conflict, so kudos for that. Conflict ...

I don't often get writers block, and when I do, I can usually break it with some freewriting. My biggest dilema is in the editing phase. Often I find that ...

Looks like most of the critiquing has been done here. They only left me one thing to say :cry: That thing is that at the start I got the impression ...

I liked the names of the wolves. They're original as far as I know. As Lydia said, it's hard to critique much on something this short. One thing I will ...

Hello again. I've done 11 reviews today and am feeling particularly caustic, so brace yourself. I had a very fuzzy idea of what was going on here. I know it ...

After reading the prologue I was expecting a fast paced thriller. As such this chapter was a little dissapointing, because there wasn't any action, and it started with a huge ...

I must say, it's not often I see such a good piece here. Your prose is excellent. Not once did I skim or drift off or even feel slightly bored. ...

I'd like to see some more thoughts from Paul, and maybe know some of his backstory. Is he annoyed at having to go out into the cold to find this ...