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This was amazing! You've got plenty of characters and eyes to describe the story through, plenty of character interaction already, and tons of action. Unlike some other works I've read ...

I love that you're trying to bring awareness to the endangerment of pandas. A few things I should note though, mostly concerning grammar... Actually, since your post is so short ...

Alrighty, finally getting back into the reviewing game! Here we go... I didn't understand this poem's setting, at first I assumed it was in space due to the name "Moby ...

Now this was a good read. It had emotion, personality, and smooth storytelling. I don't normally get emotional when reading stories, but this one made me start to tear up. ...

Wow, this was simple but powerful. The emotions are clear and you really set a scene of a boulevard of suicide. The third and fourth lines in the fourth stanza ...

You're right, this could be a book! And I'd probably read it, depending on the greater story. Still, I like what you've got going here, so far. You've got a ...

Great story! It was pretty long but well worth the read. Now let's get started with the reviewing... First off, you could use a bit of punctuation help: Then after ...

This story is quite enjoyable. It took me a moment to remember what a Mandalorian was but that's simply because I was expecting gladiators, not Star Wars characters. Very interesting ...

Wow! That plot twist! Your writing in this short isn't full of imagery, it has some but it's not stuffed. It is full of emotion, though. You can tell throughout ...

I know you said this isn't poetry, but you might be able to write a little series of other not-poems like this about different subjects. In the third stanza, where ...

I'm new to YWS and this is the first thing that I've found interesting enough to read. Honestly I didn't expect to like it, because of how I judge stories ...