Hannah

No, your story has been broken into good chunks. Like this is a good place to end a chapter and get ready to go into the next one. It's just ...

Hmm. I just separated the stanzas into what I saw as different moments of time. At first they were all in a sequence without any further separation, but I felt ...

As you continue reading poetry, I hope you let your own stories flow into the words and connect you that way! There isn't always a way that a poem "makes ...

Haha, actually didn't notice the punctuation until the sentence that I pointed out, which meant it was flying under my radar for most of this section. xD

I read it as that stylistic fragment sentence that functions as a whole sentence with an implied subject. Just imagining this -- That's ugly. Worse than silver. -- made me ...

Titles of poems are important! I interpreted this poem as being written from the perspective of a supposed h3alth junkie who is really just changing all th usual junk foods ...

Oh, awesome! Well, if you end up posting another chapter, PM me and I'll check it out. :)

Ahhhh. I see.

I would absolutely never be offended by that, Paige. This is your poem, your adventure, and I'm just doing what I can since you posted it up and asked for ...

I'll be looking forward to your PM!

So! This is a comment on the material and not a review. I had no power over that guy. I didn’t control his mind. I could have never guessed that ...

I love your review, Pingu. Thanks for the strength.

Thanks a lot, Skins! :)

This is a great and really helpful review. Thank you for mentioning what interested you and what put you off! :)

Thank you for pointing out some tangled sentences. I'll have to try reading it backward! :D