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  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Reality's Melodrama

    I like the little bit of insight at the end. Most of this poem is too overdone for my taste. There's a point where writing about common experiences isn't as ...

    Jun 8, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Devil Touch - Prologue

    Remy, the water master Compared to the other four descriptions, this is way less active. Others dance or tame or shake, but you use such a vague verb for Remy: ...

    Jun 8, 2013
  • Other » Other, Other Re: Fantasy land: Just and idea for a story.

    Hey, Jordin! Fellow Knight here, to hop on your novel as you suggested. First things first. Are you posting from a device other than your computer? Even when we're just ...

    Jun 8, 2013
  • Short Story » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: Conversation In a Diner

    The small “Order 64” sheet [Note to self: phrase better] You might call it the number ticket. In the end, I have to larger impressions about this piece. One, I ...

    Jun 8, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re:

    Okay! Well, I'd say this is not really fit for a poem format. I think making this a prose essay would work really well. It's a powerful, intense subject, and ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Poetry » Horror, General Re: Deaths Angel

    Ah! So. I am exceedingly glad that you do not steer away from gory details. In this plot, they are necessary to make the scene feel real. That said, I ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Article / Essay » Narrative, Realistic Re: taken down.

    What?! What is going on here? You skipped all the good parts!? haha. First, I love the specificity with which you talk about when you found poetry. I think the ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Other Re: The Beginning of the End

    Oh! Oh my gosh! I love a lot of this! I love the idea of this, haven't seen it before, and you've stumbled on some brilliant language to discuss this ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Poetry » Horror, Dramatic Re: Deleted

    Um. ahaha. I. I liked the reality in which this poem started. I think the image of the legs against the light is very vivid and specific and really brings ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Lyrics » Satire, Culture Re: The Books on the Shelf

    I think a lot of this works well. I haven't listened to the original! So! That's where my review's coming from. I love that somehow, even while being restricted to ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Article / Essay » General, Culture Re: Milk and Wine

    Whoo. So. I think you have a good concept and a good train of thought under all of this, but what this piece really needs is for you to go ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, Spiritual Re: Who am I?

    Huh. I am the kind of person who has always needed a plan for living, and until recently I've always known what my next step was. Now I'm sitting out ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Poetry » Fanfiction, Dramatic Re: Blink

    Ahaha, I don't know. I don't watch Doctor Who but I know the angel things are statues and if you don't look at them they come to get you or ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Other Re: What Am I?

    I think it would be important in a riddle to not use the verb form of the item you're trying to sneakily describe. So when you give everything away right ...

    Mar 24, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Sing With Your Fingertips

    Eek! Um! First! The window pane is the glass that makes the window. Usually windows are in sections, so one of those sections is the pane. o_o So I don't ...

    Mar 24, 2013


You know that place between sleep and awake, that place where you still remember dreaming? That’s where I’ll always love you. That’s where I’ll be waiting.
— J.M. Barrie, Peter Pan