GryphonFledgling

Ooh, the romantic intrigue continues... 1) The whole bit with Mariadelle doing her own hair and clothes felt weird. Yes, the maid pops in to ask about helping her, but ...

Whoa... Seems like no one is what I first expected them to be. Prince Kharles? Cad. Eloise? Juvenile witch. Duke Warrington? Arrogant cad. Raymond... I'm not really sure. Leading to... ...

Again, probably just repeating everything everyone has already said. And yet I forge ahead. 1) I love how Mariadelle is a bit of a jealous witch. She's not completely contemptible ...

Probably just repeating what everyone else has said (being a newcomer and all to the story), but I had to just say some stuff. 1) I love, love, love how ...

The sun? Amirite? Will you ever tell us? Anyway, I liked this. The imagery was actually kind of cool. The rhyme scheme seemed a little wonky though. Sometimes every other ...

This was strange, and yet beautiful. I liked the voice and the imagery was beautiful. I have to agree with Elinor, however, in that it felt a lot like poetry ...

This is lovely. I don't really have a lot to say, seeing as how this is just sort of an introduction to the characters, but it is wonderful. I actually ...

This was cool. Simple and short, but very neat. I loved the language in it. In terms of critiquing, the style change from the meditation of chalk to the scene ...

This is beautiful. I'm not a poetry critic, so I can't really give you much constructive criticism, but I just had to say that I found this so lovely. It ...

Interesting. I like the idea. It really looks like it has potential. And, omigosh, but I loved the little conversation on readers. It is so true. So true. Your dialogue ...

LittleGreenPwner: :D Made of win, that right there. Very, very nice. I love how you treat the lightsaber battles. And Jango Fett... Oh gosh, I laughed my butt off at ...

Omigosh, I love it! Yeah, not much intelligent to say from me. The sheer awesomeness that is this fic has drained it all out of me. Actually, one thing: I ...

I agree with Jetpack that the idea would come across really well as journal entries. After all, the entire thing comes across very much like personal thoughts anyway, going from ...

O.O Whoa. This was... beautiful. And sick. And disturbing. And mindblowing. I dunno. I can equate it maybe to 1984 , except a bit more surreal. In any case, amazing. ...

Wow. This was amazing. Screw scientific accuracy. I love how the otherness of the Mierans is revealed slowly. First it is hinted at with sensitive ears, then emotions and gestures ...