Okay, I got this idea from "The Hobbit". It's a riddle, and you have to guess what the poem's talking about. You can't read the other replies to get ideas. And I wouldn't mind reviews about the writing. I didn't post it just for people to try to and guess what it means.
This very thing is an unseen foe
That haunts the world with no escape.
It is not fought, for it cannot be vanquished
Yet day by it works for doom.
So slowly that it is not noticed
Until it conquers all too soon.
The minds of men it grasps within
Its cunning, ancient hands
Until it leaves a shell of what
Was once a learned man.
An indestructible fortress is built
That no army can but scratch
And horribly, but subtly
And with its strength unmatched,
It tears them down to rubble
In a miserable heap of stone.
Galaxies it shifts and changes
By the bidding of its whim.
Oceans it dehydrates
And countries are its altering limb.
Not one thing has outmatched it.
No weakness can be found.
But in its daunting, gradual way
It turns the universe around.
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Canary word: Present
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ONLY READ THIS IF YOU'VE ALREADY GUESSED THE RIDDLE OR ELSE YOU'RE A CHEATER AND THE RIDDLE'S NOT FUN ANYMORE!!!! So, if you've already guessed, the answer was time. If you're a fan of Lord of the Rings, you didn't even have to think about it. A lot of people got the right answer. Congrats! And the rhyming's not supposed to be perfect. It's half prose, half rhyming poem.
At first I thought it was greed, but now I think it's time. Um...I can't think of anything that's wrong with it. I agree with GryphonFledgling about the rhyming, though. Great job!
Sorry, I don't have time for a review but I would like to guess. It it time? Hopefully you let us know someday. Anyways, I really like it. It has great imagery and rhythm plus its a fun puzzle. Bravo!
-Meggy
The sun? Amirite? Will you ever tell us?
Anyway, I liked this. The imagery was actually kind of cool. The rhyme scheme seemed a little wonky though. Sometimes every other line would rhyme and sometimes it wouldn't. I was just a bit confused by that.
But very clever.
*thumbs up*
~GryphonFledgling