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Re: Title: Why Not. Chapter 1: Just A Regular Day
Review ahoy! Okie dokie, first off: title! Please, please, please give your work a title. It doesn't have to be a great title, but anything is better than "Untitled" or ...
Jun 26, 2010 -
Re: Blood Type - Steampunk Story
Hey hi! Steampunk! *froths at the mouth* I lurves me some steam, punk. Anyhoo, actual reviewing... The beginning bit of narration was interesting. Really made it sound like a journal ...
Jun 20, 2010 -
Re: Death's Riddle
Hello there! I come bearing reviews! a happy expression on his face This... bugged me. It's just so non-specific. What does this happy expression look like? Does Death have any ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Apprently, We're Just Good Friends.
D'aw. This was short and sweet. Not a lot of character development, not a lot of story and angst, but great just the way it was. I actually liked the ...
Jun 2, 2010 -
Re: Forever Moore
Hey hi! There was some interesting character interaction here, but I'm not sure if what I got from it is exactly what you are going for. Forever seems actually really ...
May 27, 2010 -
Re: Present Past
This was lovely. It was so flighty and confused and melancholic. I'm not sure if I could completely follow along with everything, but it was definitely emotive. I just felt ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Too Soon - Chapter 1
Hello! A few nitpicks: Each family will only be allotted two gallons of water and four food units per day Two gallons of water a day seems really low. A ...
May 19, 2010 -
Re: Six Feet Under The Stars
I started to try to read this. I really did. The title was what hooked me. I wanted to see what all it was about. But the blocks! The ginormous ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: Re: The Old Woman and the Werewolf (2 of 2)
*whoot* Part two! Still liked this, but having come to the end, it seems like it's more of a scene of a greater story, or just a meeting, a moment ...
May 13, 2010 -
Re: The Old Woman and the Werewolf (1 of 2)
Heya! I liked this. The genre-savvy grandma alone made this a great read. Other werewolves would know what had transpired, and they would hunt him down for his transgression. I'm ...
May 13, 2010 -
Re: Gingerbread [Edited]
*blink* Interesting re-imagining. You managed to make an already-dark story even darker. Spiffy. I was a little confused as to what time period you were shooting for. At first, it ...
May 11, 2010 -
Re: Frog Legs
Awwww. Seriously, that was what I was thinking the whole way through. "D'awwww, so cute!" The voice for the whole piece was so fussy, so grown-up, so perfect for an ...
May 11, 2010 -
Re: Peanut Butter Banana Sandwiches
D'awww. So sweet. Won't nitpick, just point out my quick general impressions. I liked the relationships between the characters and the making-up scene was really sweet. However, it felt a ...
May 5, 2010 -
Re: Carved into Skin
O_O Dark. Like, really dark. I was flinching reading it. Good job? (I guess?) That said, the story did a lot of telling and not much showing. "Tell, not show" ...
Apr 27, 2010 -
Re: A Dangerous Game of Truth or Dare
'Allo! What have we here? No title? *eyes bleed* Anything is better than "Title needed" or "Untitled". Anything . Try "Truth or Dare" as a placeholder. Anything. Any story deserves ...
Apr 27, 2010
