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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Title: Why Not. Chapter 1: Just A Regular Day

    Review ahoy! Okie dokie, first off: title! Please, please, please give your work a title. It doesn't have to be a great title, but anything is better than "Untitled" or ...

    Jun 26, 2010
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Blood Type - Steampunk Story

    Hey hi! Steampunk! *froths at the mouth* I lurves me some steam, punk. Anyhoo, actual reviewing... The beginning bit of narration was interesting. Really made it sound like a journal ...

    Jun 20, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Death's Riddle

    Hello there! I come bearing reviews! a happy expression on his face This... bugged me. It's just so non-specific. What does this happy expression look like? Does Death have any ...

    Jun 3, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Apprently, We're Just Good Friends.

    D'aw. This was short and sweet. Not a lot of character development, not a lot of story and angst, but great just the way it was. I actually liked the ...

    Jun 2, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Forever Moore

    Hey hi! There was some interesting character interaction here, but I'm not sure if what I got from it is exactly what you are going for. Forever seems actually really ...

    May 27, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Present Past

    This was lovely. It was so flighty and confused and melancholic. I'm not sure if I could completely follow along with everything, but it was definitely emotive. I just felt ...

    May 19, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Too Soon - Chapter 1

    Hello! A few nitpicks: Each family will only be allotted two gallons of water and four food units per day Two gallons of water a day seems really low. A ...

    May 19, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Six Feet Under The Stars

    I started to try to read this. I really did. The title was what hooked me. I wanted to see what all it was about. But the blocks! The ginormous ...

    May 17, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Re: The Old Woman and the Werewolf (2 of 2)

    *whoot* Part two! Still liked this, but having come to the end, it seems like it's more of a scene of a greater story, or just a meeting, a moment ...

    May 13, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Old Woman and the Werewolf (1 of 2)

    Heya! I liked this. The genre-savvy grandma alone made this a great read. Other werewolves would know what had transpired, and they would hunt him down for his transgression. I'm ...

    May 13, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Gingerbread [Edited]

    *blink* Interesting re-imagining. You managed to make an already-dark story even darker. Spiffy. I was a little confused as to what time period you were shooting for. At first, it ...

    May 11, 2010
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Frog Legs

    Awwww. Seriously, that was what I was thinking the whole way through. "D'awwww, so cute!" The voice for the whole piece was so fussy, so grown-up, so perfect for an ...

    May 11, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Peanut Butter Banana Sandwiches

    D'awww. So sweet. Won't nitpick, just point out my quick general impressions. I liked the relationships between the characters and the making-up scene was really sweet. However, it felt a ...

    May 5, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Carved into Skin

    O_O Dark. Like, really dark. I was flinching reading it. Good job? (I guess?) That said, the story did a lot of telling and not much showing. "Tell, not show" ...

    Apr 27, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: A Dangerous Game of Truth or Dare

    'Allo! What have we here? No title? *eyes bleed* Anything is better than "Title needed" or "Untitled". Anything . Try "Truth or Dare" as a placeholder. Anything. Any story deserves ...

    Apr 27, 2010


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