Griffinkeeper

anyway now thanks to you i will have to wait until the end of the year for BOTH of his stories, i was only here to read his stories, so ...

That also a bad way to take a critique. The best way is to use it, not leave writing forever. No one starts an excellent writer, one has to work ...

Landing perch, I like that. Okay, it will be added.

A landing pad is someplace that a gryphon can land. There is no medieval equivalent to this and it would be silly to call it anything else. Except a landing ...

You are really obsessed with Gryphons, that can be slightly off-putting. No, not off-putting, more like; repetitive. Maybe you should do more with your stories then just write about Gryphons. ...

I can't drop the second sentence without ruining the rest of the dialogue. I'll have to figure out another way. Anyways, thanks for the review Dusky! And yes, that was ...

It's spelled "Lingerie." Don't look at me like that!

Okay, I fixed it. Anyone else?

Nicely done.

I think this is really cool. Kind of a confusing imagery, but it worked out after a little thought. Nice to have poems which make you think, versus decoding.

There are definite grammar problems though, snoink, you should fix that up. Grammar problems? Nah... this is perfect. :P Blasphemy! *Grabs torches*

Not bad, spelling looks okay. You use "And" to start a sentence, which isn't good since the word "And" is a conjunction. Other than that, this looks good!

Would you mind informing us of your artistic intent in this case? It seems very... suggestive. It seems okay in the structural and spelling aspects, but I'm seriously freaked out. ...

*Frowns* Dragons=Fantasy Fiction Really... *Moved*

Can someone please tell me what the Redwall series is about? Karma, what happened to your typing? Could you edit your post please?